2010年中考英语满分作文2(4)

    标准范文
    Our Steel Rose lost a chance to take part in the Women's World Cup．But the players never gave up．They said they would try their best to improve themselves．
    I always meet some problems in my study．Every day I have too much homework to do，while I have too little time for rest．I feel nervous because of too much pressure．Sometimes I really tired of studying．I even don't know what to do．I think I have lost myself．This feeling makes me angry easily．
    What should I do? The players from National Women Soccer Team set a good example for me．That is "never give up"．I think I should learn how to study．First，relax myself though I have much to do．Second，talk with my parents，teachers or friends to ask them for suggestions．Maybe they can help me out of such pressure．Third，make a good plan for my study and find out my own way to learn．
    In a word，I will never give up．I will regard the problems as challenges．I will try my best to make my dream come true．
   
重庆卷
    中考真题
    在和谐社会里，人与人之间的互帮互助已构成我们生活中的重要组成部分。下周英国友好学校将来你校访问，你校英语俱乐部将举行一次以“Helping Each Other Makes the World Wonderful”为主题的英语演讲比赛。假如李智要参加演讲比赛，请你以“李智”的名义用英语写一篇演讲稿。内容要点提示：
    1．帮助同学——友谊；
    2．帮助老人——幸福；
    3．帮助病人——快乐；
    4．帮助别人体会……
    要求：
    1．词数：80 词左右。正文开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
    2．文中不能出现自己的姓名和所在学校的名称。
    Helping Each Other Makes the World Wonderful
    Hello，everyone．I'm Li Zhi．It's nice to speak about help here．______
    Thank you for your listening!
    名师解析
    1．试题解读
    本文要求写一篇演讲稿，属于半开放式作文。命题者关注创建和谐社会的重要因素——互帮互助，要求学生就“Helping Each Other Makes the World Wonderful”这一主题，具体论述一下帮助同学、老师和病人给我们生活带来的好处，同时谈一下自己对“帮助别人”这一主题的体会。此考题紧跟时代步伐，体现了英语学习应该注意实用性，生活性的原则。人称、时态运用应恰当、准确，各个要点间应保持逻辑连贯，行文通顺。
    2．写作信息要点
    (1) 帮助同学有助于发展同学之间的友谊。
    (2) 帮助老人能使我们懂得幸福的真谛。
    (3) 帮助病人会让我们体会快乐的滋味。
    (4) 作者对“帮助别人”这一主题的体会。
    3．可用素材
    (1) 词汇：
    develop friendship，give a hand，pleasure，patient，happy
    (2) 句式：
    ① If we often help our classmates，we can easily develop good friendship with them．
    ② Helping the old is also necessary，which can make us feel very happy．
    ③ What I want to stress is that we should give a hand to patients when necessary．
    ④ I believe that the sincere help between people is of great significance．
    4．注意事项
    (1) 认真审题，文章要求学生论述帮助别人给我们生活带来的好处及自己对这一主题的认识，写作时不能偏离主题，肆意发挥。
    (2) 文章的主题时态应该为一般现在时态。
    (3) 在表达方式上不应该只是简单的逐条翻译，而是将所给的几个要点合理地组成比较通顺的语句，因此要仔细组织语言，合理安排结构。
    满分文展示 1
Helping Each Other Makes the World Wonderful
    Hello，everyone．I'm Li Zhi．It's nice to speak about help here．(①As we all know，helping others is a good virtue in your life，which all of us should treasure．)
    To begin with，if we often help our classmates，(②we can easily develop good friendship with) them．Besides，we should often help the old，which is not only useful to them but also makes us full of happiness．(③As a proverb goes，"Life is not all roses"．)Therefore，there are many patients in our life．(④By giving them a hand，we are sure to feel very pleased and comfortable．)
    In a word，I believe that the sincere help between people is (⑤of great significance．)(⑥Only with the care and help of others，can we get out of the difficulties in life and live happily．)
    旁批
    1．此句正确地使用定语从句揭示主题，起到了开门见山的作用。在这个句中出现的 a go virtue 和 treasure 两个词充分体现了作者扎实的语言功底。