2010年中考英语满分作文1

 北京卷
    中考真题
    根据中文提示和英文书信内容，写一封意思连贯，符合逻辑，不少于 60 词的回信，信的开头和结尾已给出，其词数不计入所完成的回信内。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。
    假如你叫刘京，是美国中学生托尼的笔友，你收到了他的来信。请给托尼写一封回信，回答他的问题，介绍北京良好的公交服务，并淡谈你的感受。
    Hi! Liu Jing，
    My grandpa is going to Beijing next month because he has heard a lot about the city and he would like to see it himself．He says the bus service in Beijing is very good now，and people can go anywhere by bus．Is he right? Can you tell me something more about it?
    I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
    Yours，
    Tony
    Hi! Tony，
    I'm glad to know your grandpa is coming to Beijing．_______
    If you have more questions，please ask me．
    Yours，
    Liu Jing
    名师解析
    1．试题解读
    这则书面表达要求考生写一则回信，内容涉及北京良好的公交服务。公交服务与考生日常生活息息相关，故该写作任务所涉及的写作内容具体，只要平时稍作留意应会有所了解。动手写作时能详细加以表达。但写作要求中不仅涉及介绍，还涉及谈论感受，故考生应注意表达内容全面，不可遗漏要点，所表达观点尽量有自己的独特性，这样才能在数篇中考作文中脱颖而出。
    2．写作信息要点
    ① 回信的基本客套语；
    ② 介绍北京良好的公交服务；
    ③ 谈论自己对北京公交服务的看法。
    3．可用素材
    (1) 词汇：
    bus service，excellent，seat，environment，wait for a bus，tickets，cheap，good manners，take，bus lines，spend
    (2) 句式：
    ① It's right that your grandpa says that the bus service in Beijing is very good now．
    ② It's true that the bus service in Beijing is very good now．
    ③ There is no trouble for your grandpa to go anywhere in Beijing．
    ④ There are bus lines all over．
    ⑤ I believe your grandpa will enjoy our good bus service here．
    4．注意事项
    (1) 写回信应对来信中所提及的问题有针对性地进行回答，不可避重就轻；
    (2) 注意正确使用信件的格式；
    (3) 介绍北京良好的公交服务应为本文的重点写作内容；
    (4) 注意避免表达的语言平淡化。
    满分文展示 1
    Dear Tony，
    I'm glad to know your grandpa is coming to Beijing．
    (①What your grandpa say is right．)The bus service in Beijing is now really very good．(②As a matter of fact，buses play an important role in our daily life．)(③It's very convenient to travel everywhere because there are bus lines all over，even to villages．)There are bus stops here and there，so you needn't wait for a long time．What's more，the tickets are very cheap．(④The drivers are not only good at driving but also kind to passengers．)
    I really enjoy taking a bus here．(⑤It's so comfortable here．)
    If you have more questions，please ask me．
    Yours，
    Liu Jing
    旁批
    ① What your grandpa says 在句中为一个主语从句，属于语法高级结构。
    ② As a matter of fact 在句中起过渡作用，后面的 play an important role 表示“充当重要角色”，是一个高级词汇。
    ③ 这是一个主从复合句，其中 it's convenient to do 句型表示“做某事是方便的”。属于高级表达方式。
    ④ 该句中使用了 not only... but also... 结构，该结构的使用，使表达尤为简洁明了。
    ⑤ 此处是一个 so... that... 引导的结果状语从句，表明了作者的观点和态度。
    满分揭秘
    作者就对方来信的内容有针对性地作出了回答，详细介绍了北京公交的良好服务，语言具有很强的感染力。文章中多处使用主从复合句和复杂句型，体现了作者对语言较好的把握能力和驾驭能力。as a matter of fact，even，what's more 在一定程度上使文章的表达更加流畅连贯。总之，该中考临场作文是一篇不可多得的优秀作文。
    标准范文
    Dear Tony，
    I'm glad to know your grandpa is coming to Beijing．
    Your grandpa is right．The bus service in Beijing is really good now．There are bus lines all over．Buses can even take you to a small village．Besides，special seats are offered on buses．People do not have to spend a long time waiting for a bus and the tickets are cheap．