2010年中考英语满分作文1(2)

    I like taking a bus because I think it's comfortable and also good for the environment．So it's a good choice for your grandpa to travel by bus in Beijing．
    If you have more questions，please ask me．
    Yours，
    Liu Jing
河北卷
    中考真题
    回想三年的英语学习历程，丰富多彩的英语课堂活动一定给你留下了许多难忘的印象。请你以“What should we do in English class?”为题写一篇英语短文，谈谈在英语课堂上学生应该怎样做，才能使英语学习更有效。
    提示：(1) Listen to the teacher．
    (2) Take part in activities．
    (3) Be confident in ourselves．
    要求：(1) 文稿须包括所有提示内容，可适当发挥。
    (2) 文稿中不得出现真实的人名、校名和地名。
    (3) 词数：60 ～ 80 个。
    参考词汇：take notes，work in groups with...，not be afraid of...
    What should we do in English class?
    In English class，we should ______
    名师解析
    1．试题解读
    本文为提纲式说明文体裁。文章要求学生就“在英语课堂上学生应该怎样做，才能使英语学习更有效”这一话题谈一下自己的具体想法。此话题与学生生活紧紧相关，因此在写作时，考生只要把所给要点逐条陈述，适度发挥，就能写出一篇内容丰富的文章；同时要注意文章说理清楚，语言流畅，句式表达多样，用词恰当、准确。
    2．写作信息要点
    ① 学生要做到课上认真听讲。
    ② 学生要积极参加课堂活动。
    ③ 学生应该保持自信的态度。
    3．可用素材
    (1) 词汇：
    Listen to the teacher，pay attention to，take part in，confident，be afraid of，improve
    (2) 句式：
    ① The more carefully you listen，the more useful information you can get．
    ② In order to learn English well，we are supposed to take part in all kinds of activities．
    ③ It is very important for us to be confident．
    ④ As long as we remember all these ways，we will surely make it in English in the end．
    4．注意事项：
    (1) 本文属于说明文，文章所用的时态要以一般现在时态为主。
    (2) 可适度发挥，但切忌直译要点造成信息的简单罗列和堆砌。
    (3) 注意保持行文连贯，使文章富有条理性和逻辑性。
    满分文展示 1
What should we do in English class?
    In English class，we should listen to the teacher carefully．(①Without doubt，the more carefully you listen，the more useful information you can get．)(②Besides，taking notes is also a good way to pay attention to our teacher．)
    In order to learn English well，we(③are supposed to) take part in all kinds of activities．We need to work in groups with our classmates and talk with them in English．
    (④Last but not least，it is very important for us to be confident．)We shouldn't be afraid of making mistakes in class．(⑤Only in this way，can we improve our English．)
    旁批
    ① 此句 without doubt 一词用得非常得体，使后面句子的出现自然顺畅而不唐突。此外句中应用了 the more...，the more... 的结构，语言既地道又有韵味。
    ② 此句应用了动名词做主语的结构，使句子充实而有生机。
    ③ he supposed to do 这一短语的选用，显示了作者时英语词汇的熟练运用能力。
    ④ last but not least 这一词组为过渡性词组，它的运用使文章过渡自然，使文章结构更加紧凑、连贯。
    ⑤ 此句中，“only + 介词短语”置于句首，构成了部分倒装结构，为文章档次的提升起到了很大的作用。此外，作者用这样一个句子收尾，很自然地引出了自己的观点。
    满分揭秘
    本文结构清晰，同时句式使用得熟练而准确。本文分为三段，每个段落对应一项在课堂上应该如何学好英语的具体措施。行文连贯，表达顺畅，层次分明，让人一目了然。在句式使用上，作者用法多样。尤其是动名词作主语和倒装句式的运用，为文章增色不少。此外，本文最大的特点是运用了很多自然得体的过渡性词语，使文章浑然一体。
    标准范文
What should we do in English class?
    In English class，we should listen to the teacher carefully and take notes when necessary．Try to answer questions in English．
    We should take part in all kinds of activities，like reading，writing，having discussions and playing games．We need to work in groups with our classmates to help each other and learn from each other．
    It's very important to be confident．Speak English loudly in front of the class and never be afraid of making mistakes．In this way，we can make much progress．